5 Tanka Trials
Eloquence of Love
I hesitated
To say my true feelings
Soon after our tryst
The memory of your eyes
Told me to be eloquent
Stay
Can you stay longer?
At least until the rain stops
My bed is still warm
With your smoldering kiss
And your scorching embrace
Memories of You
My memory talks
In loud words and images
Of your poise and endless grace
A picture of elegance
A heavenly hymn of praise
The Eucalyptus
The eucalyptus
Rained its shimmering jade leaves
Below its bowers
Where you and I slept the night
Soft ground, a blanket of green
The Dawn
The dawn we failed to see
Neath blankets huddling in the cold
But no big regrets
We’ll wait for it tomorrow
And maybe miss it again
wow! i like the "the dawn"
Submitted by daimustlive on September 24, 2008 - 11:55am.
wow! i like the "the dawn" especially. it sounds nice and funny. ^^
Thanks guys. I am trying
Submitted by ed_roa on September 24, 2008 - 12:20pm.
Thanks guys. I am trying this japanese verse form, medyo limitado yung space ng haiku. Maybe I will enoy writing tanka more.
i agree with you sir, mas
Submitted by daimustlive on September 24, 2008 - 12:22pm.
i agree with you sir, mas mahirap ang haiku, pero your haikus were great!
looking forward to more tanka from you. keep on writing! ^^
nice try sir!
such a sweet and romantic prose =)