ano pong ibig sabhin po nun qya? luma po vha un?

cnxa na d q po alam eh baguhan lang po me, tsaka ganyan po ang istilo q sa paggawa ng tula eh

For me the best pieces are those written from the heart. This one is a good example of that. It may be far from perfect and less engaging to capture the interest of its readers but it is a good start nonetheless.

I may suggest more reading on your end so you could gather more information and hone your poetry and writing skills.

Never stop writing from your heart. It would set your emotions free!

---------------------------------------------------------------------"Sometimes, I think the things I remember are more real than the things I see..."

ibig sabihin naglipana na sa bangketa ang mga ganyan..makikita mo kahit saan though hindi naman masama pero ordinaryo ang dating..make somthing na kakaiba ung readers may raise brows. or masusuka or matatakot..kahit namans a panitikan we need to raise the bar..wag laging tungkol sa sarili mga tulang halimbawa:

"ang tutuli ni David" or Kandila kay Ate"

"katulad ka din ng nakaraan, isang pangarap lang..bukas may darating..pangarap din" 

http://cutedaw-starblaze.blogspot.com/

I couldn't agree more! :)

Pero let's give the guy a fair fighting chance. Baguhan pa nga lang daw sya. Let's wait and see sa mga future compositions nya. Mga 3 or 4 attempts pa and see kung may improvements. Pag wala pa rin, feel free to lambast him na. Joke! :D 

"Sometimes, I think the things I remember are more real than the things I see..."

hahahaha! salamat daily sam, pero diba may kasabihan "ang kalabaw para tumino kelangan pinapalo" at "habang bata pa baluktutin na ang puno"

i'm not tellin this for some other reasons..i'm tellin this not becoz i want him to take chance of those lines that the pros have, but im tellin this becoz i want him to get out of his box. take the road less traveled wika nga ni robert frost..

ganyan din ako dati nilait lait dito sa FW ahahaha! wala daw wenta ang mga gawa ko..but then after matuyo ang mga luha ko sa pighati patuloy pa din akong nagsulat ng mga walang wenta ahahahaha!

"katulad ka din ng nakaraan, isang pangarap lang..bukas may darating..pangarap din" 

http://cutedaw-starblaze.blogspot.com/

Ay pareho tayo ng experience sa laitan! Though mine naman is not from here in FW, another blogsite in tagalog din. Ok lang na sabihang "baduy".."makaluma".."balagtas style"..its all cool kasi intentional naman talaga yung style na ginagamit ko on most of my poetries in tagalog. It is not for everyone to appreciate and I get that. Pero yung sabihan ka na 'you do not have the making of a writer/poet and you NEVER will so stop trying!'...- eh humihingi na ng away yun. Hahaha! Hindi ko na pinatulan. For me kasi I write for leisure and as an emotional outlet na rin. Kaya nga sa blogs ako nagpo-post kasi aware naman ako na hindi ako pang-'PRO'. I just want my sentiments to be put out there, be felt by some if not many and chances are..it may touch or relieve other lives at a given perfect moment. Ganun lang ka-simple ang emote ko :-)

Kita mo naman ikaw now, madami ka ng followers na bilib sa mga compositions mo! :-) Pero I agree on your mentioned kind of teaching or support method. Minsan din kasi mas effective ang carino brutal na approach kesa text book style. It will drove one to exert creative effort to their maximum limit...until such time na limitless na lahat para sa kanya.

"Sometimes, I think the things I remember are more real than the things I see..."