MASK

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A MOLD PAPER

A FACE OF JOKER

HIDING SECRET AND LIES

 

A TEMPT

FOR THE INNOCENT

FOR THE IGNORANCE

THAT COULD RUIN AND HARM

THE REALITY

 

A MASK

AN OBJECT

THAT HIDE THE LIE

THAT SAY’S MAGIC OF DESTRUCTION

 

DON’T TRUST

BECAUSE A HYPOCRITE

HIDE ON A MASK

MARK WILLIAM

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I liked the idea present in the poem. Im not even remotely a good writer, pero comment ko lang, there were a few parts that weren't grammatically correct. Ewan ko lang ha.

okey

Writers has a right to be wrong. Ewan but I dont see any gramatical errors.

Your call tsong. Maybe youre

Your call tsong. Maybe youre right. Writers HAVE a right to be wrong. Maybe it was just me, I thought I saw something there. Dont mind me.

intriguing principle # 1

 "writers have a right to be wrong."

is that something written on a stone tablet somewhere? last i checked, artists have a "license." artistic license, they call it. now, writers have one, too. it's the right to be wrong.

betcha by golly, wow. this is the one that ive been waiting for forever.

im usually ignorant of these "writisms". but if you folks are just talking about grammatical points (and not about eternal, undying literary principles handed down by Moses himself) and how the "Mask" poem is so full of these apparently small, apparently unimportant grammatical lapses, then maybe i have a couple of cents to contribute to the intelligent discussion.

there's such a thing as writing in a borrowed (english) language. there's such a thing as verb-subject agreement. there's such a thing as a poem that probably has a "message" but has so  many little awkward grammar errors that get in the way of the reader's full enjoyment.

and funny, but "Mask" is such a poem. if you'd ask Tinio, he'd say, "it deserves to die."

may god bless all our souls so we can enjoy more "writisms" like this one. 

The Skirmisher

Hi Mark. You say that you

Hi Mark. You say that you want to be a writer. Judging from the amount of work you've accumulated here, I guess you're serious about it. For that, I commend you. Keep writing.

(But here's the pill. Two pills actually.)

First, you DO need to work on your grammar. If you want to be good--really good--at your craft, then learn to use your tools well. You can't expect a carpenter to build a sturdy (and beautiful) house if he can't drive a nail straight.

Second, listen to constructive criticism. You'll miss out on opportunities to improve your writing if you don't.

Writers make mistakes, yes. That's what prompted Stephen King to say: "To write is human, to edit divine." But I don't think that's the same as saying "Writers have a right to be wrong." The former is an admission. The latter is an excuse.

Keep writing Mark. I hope to see more of your work sometime.

Thanks

Thanks for the encouragement. I will do best in order for me to have an excellent obra maestra. And don't worry natupad ko na ang pangarap ko. Writer na me