One

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One

If I am a river
And you are the sea
Then someday, my love
You'll be waiting for me
Someday, my love
When all our days have gone by
Then both of us will share
A rain cloud in the sky

If I am a forest
And you are the sun
Then with you, my love
My life has just begun
With you, my love
I will never disappear
Because the light that you give
Is the reason why I'm here

If I am an eagle
And you are the sky
Then forever, my love
To you, I will fly
Forever my love
I will fly and touch your face
And live with you
All my nights and days
Together, my love
We’ll live forevermore
As one,  we’ll fly to heaven’s door

09, 11 April 2005/12 February 2009

Patrick Orquia

this my 2nd poem for the poetry night.

 

I forget why I wrote this poem. maybe just tinkling with rhymes and metaphors during that time.

i changed the ending of this poem. the original stanza goes like this:

If I am an eagle
And you are the sky
Then forever, my love
To you, I will fly
Forever my love
I will fly unto the sun
Because with you
My life has just begun
Forever, my love
We will be as one.

 

i never liked the last 4 lines  as i remember back then, i thought it was too cheesy. so luckily i was able to come up with an alternate ending, so to speak. which i think is better.


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this poem

is nice. i like it.

 

congrats na rin kahit dinedma mo kame. hehehe

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sorisorisorisorisori po!

hindi ko po kasi kayo kilala e. kilala niyo na ako so sa susunod, kayo na lang lumapit sa akin, if you wouldn't mind. thanks.

 

pakibasa rin po yun nauna kong tula nung poetry night:

 

http://www.filipinowriter.com/lets-die-somewhere-else

salamat po!

 

 

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