This is my term paper for LIT101 (a paper for the short story "Ang Payneta" by Dollysbigbaby) - midterm
Submitted by jeazelle on March 22, 2010 - 1:52am.
Ang Payneta by Dollysbigbaby
The short story “Ang Payneta” written by Dollysbigbaby, one of the members and good contributor of the literary site www.filipinowriter.com. The short story “Ang Payneta” is about an office girl that commutes in order to go to office and to get home. One time she was fixing her bad hair and as a remedy, she put a nice hair accessory on it. When she is getting ready for home at the comfort room, she thought that her beauty is being wasted since she has no boyfriend. It would be better if she would see the guy she admires that night.
Later that night, her wish was granted. She and the guy she admires are riding the same jeepney. When she is already getting off the jeepney, her hair accessory got tangled to the lose wiring at the ceiling. She felt so embarrassed. She couldn’t get her hair off the loose wiring. Then a man helped her. Because of that very shameful moment, she just thanked the man and left the jeepney without looking back. She heard the people behind her giggle.
She was walking really fast so that she could easily get out of the sight of the people from the jeepney. While walking, she noticed that her hair is very messy so she tried to fix it. Only then she became aware that she already lost her hair accessory. She thought that it was better that she lost it. She even cursed the hair accessory. Then she heard somebody said “Miss suklay mo”. When she looked at her side, she saw the apple of her eye. She was in cloud nine. The guy introduced himself as Earl and she told him her name, Ona. They are living I neighboring villages. And one her neighbors is Earl’s friend. He even asked her if he can one time drop by her house and she said yes.
She held tight on her accessory. She even asked for apology for cursing it. She thought that the accessory has been her lucky charm. And that she would wear it again.
Of all the short stories posted in the filipinowriter, only the short story “Ang Payeta” made me smile a lot. It has an effect that it takes away all my stress because it is very comic, very light to read and very relaxing. If you would notice, it is realistic. It shows the light side of the real life. It portrayed the funny side of life. It also showed that even embarrassing moments can be the start of something really good.
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maraming salamat po sa
Submitted by jeazelle on March 22, 2010 - 10:42pm.
maraming salamat po sa pag gawa ninyo ng isang kwento na napakasyang basahin... sa totoo lang po, sa tuwing nababasa ko po ang inyong gawa ay hindi ko mapigilan ang mapangiti.
at tungkol naman po sa grado ko... hindi pa po ito nakikita ng aking guro...
muli... maraming salamat po...
~♥~ Hindi mararamdaman ang tunay na kaligayahan kung hindi natin alam kung paano masaktan ~♥~
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Nakakataba naman ng puso, girl!
Submitted by dollysbigbaby on March 23, 2010 - 8:45am.
I hope you have time to edit pa. May I post my comments here for your consideration?
1. Read it again many times over and check for typo errors. Double check your prepositions and subject-verb agreement. Know the difference between "loose" and "lose".
2. For the benefit of the uneducated, define what "payneta" is. Precisely what kind of hair ornament is it?
3. Check again the story and see whether the details agree with what you've written. Is Earl really just friends with Ona's neighbor? Does the story say that they live in neighboring "villages"?
4. It would be better if you can insert your own personal insights and assumptions on the story. Why do you think does the protagonist act that way? Free your mind. Don't stick to just saying how you feel about it. Tell the reader why you feel that way. Expound on your last paragraph.
Just my thoughts lang naman.
Again, thank you very much, good luck and keep the pen burning!
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in short
Submitted by Luca on March 23, 2010 - 9:56am.
paghusayan pa ang pambobola.
charot!!!
hehehe... tama si baby (naks, baby na talaga pangalan mo okay?)
marami tayong levels ng interpretation (na nakalimutan ko na)
basta ito yung isang model na naaalala ko,
1.practical- tingnan kung nagmemake sense ba yung gawa on a physical level. (siyempre may mga gawa ni parang dream-like o absurdo)
2.symbolic- tingnan kung may mas malalim na pakahulugan ang mga kunseptong ginamit sa gawa
3.social- ano ang saysay nito sa lipunan?
4.psychological- ano ang saysay/paliwanag nito sa level ng individual, bakit ganun yung takbo nung gawa?
5.metaphysical- anong universal truth ba ang pinapahiwatig o gustong sabihin ng akda?
weh, imbento ko lang yan.
Matalino naman ako, mabait, may hitsura—masuwerte daw ang lalaking makakatuluyan ko.
Masuwerte at imaginary.
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PANTASTIK!
Submitted by dollysbigbaby on March 23, 2010 - 10:19am.
talino mo talaga, gurl! mamudmod ka naman ng brain tutal nagreregenerate naman ang brain cells mo e (namumukod tangi ka!).
ahihihi
beautifully yours,
big baby
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ay! anoh etech?
Submitted by dollysbigbaby on March 23, 2010 - 1:05pm.
okey lang girl... wait lang ang byuti ko. pero...
Kung ano man yung narinig mo, hindi "I love you" yun! Assumera!
sinong assumptionista ang kaaway natin, mare? did i miss something? lost akoh... :-?
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well, if u say so...
Submitted by dollysbigbaby on March 24, 2010 - 8:35am.
kakantahan na lang kita:
Now when I caught myself
I had to stop myself
From saying something that
I should've never thought
Now when I caught myself
I had to stop myself
From saying something that
I should've never thought of you
Of you
You're pushing and pulling me down to you
Now I don't know what I want
Now I don't know what I waaaaaant...
Sabihin mo pag babatuhin mo na ko ha... iilag ako.
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lupit mo bebe...
Submitted by Luca on March 23, 2010 - 12:06am.
some say you are a legend! ayos
Matalino naman ako, mabait, may hitsura—masuwerte daw ang lalaking makakatuluyan ko.
Masuwerte at imaginary.
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huwaw! ahihi
Submitted by dollysbigbaby on March 23, 2010 - 8:46am.
legend... parang grandma ko lang. i feel ancient, yet beautiful pa rin. hahaha!
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thanks a lot, jeazelle!
have you submitted this already? i wonder how you fared.
i'm really flattered that you chose to write about my piece. kaya lang, to say that this short story is the only one in fw that made you "smile a lot" might be stretching the truth a bit too much.
good luck and God bless!
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