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Submitted by Robert Raquino on February 22, 2007 - 5:52am. | |

No Matter how much I try,
In no way I will perceive.
Purpose and reason I cry,
With only passions to keep.

Nothing extraordinary.
I embrace the warmth of daylight,
Or clench the bitter taste of darkenss.
We are the same or so I hope.

Time proves itself again and again,
Through each moment we grow and learn.
What I am and what I can bestow,
Only comprehended through others.

Without doubt or retribution,
Calmness and comfort I bequeath.
Without notice, shorn of attention,
your splendor and beauty revealed.

I am just grass and that's how I feel,
Ignored, taken for granted, wounded.
Suffering and anguish besiege me,
Until what defines me parts away.

My 2nd work. Needed to write this for an assignement. Comments are always welcome!

Robert Raquino

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Kung ako...

Submitted by jeNadriano on February 26, 2007 - 10:08am.
Naging mabulaklak yung mga salitang ginamit mo and totoong mas "poetic" or "classy" ang dating ng mga lines na binitawan mo dahil sa tulong ng mga salitang ayun. Although sa opinion ko pare, siguro mellow down a bit on those "flowery" words. Kung kaya naman idescribe ng mas simple na term, yun na lang para mas lumakas ang dating ng mga mabibigat mong salita. Mas pansin. Mas may impact. Well, opinyon ko lang yun men a...
Ito yung parang "inedit" ko na tula mo - konting pagbabago lang.

Unexpected

No matter how much I try
in no way will I perceive
the purpose
and reasons
my eyes sheds tears.

Nothing extraordinary.

I do embrace the
warmth of daylight
and clench the bitter
taste of darkenss.

We
are all
the same

or so I hope.

We grow.
We learn.
Through time.

Without doubt
nor retribution,
calmness and comfort
I bequeath. Without notice
shorn of attention,
your splendor and beauty revealed.

Like a grass,
ignored,
wounded,
taken for granted,

I lie with anguish.

Suffering.
Without you

noticing.

Until what defiens me
parts away.

Ayun lang men! Pagpatuloy ang pagsusulat!!
Ingat ingat!
 
Steady.
PeaceLove&RockN'Roll.
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Salamat

Submitted by Robert Raquino on March 22, 2007 - 4:59am.

Thanks for the comment and suggestion. Anyway I edited it and tried using your style so eto. comment kung mas ok. eto na pinasa ko for midterms heehehe.

Unexpected

 
No matter how much I try,

In no way will I perceive.

The purpose and reasons,

My eyes shed tears.

 

Nothing extraordinary.

 

I do embrace the warmth of daylight,

And clench the bitter taste of darkness.

We are all the same,

 

 Or so I hope.

 

Time proves itself,

Through each moment.

We grow and learn.

 

What I am and what I can bestow,

Only seen through others.

 

Without doubt nor retribution,

Calmness and comfort I bequeath.

Without notice, shorn of attention,

Your splendor and beauty revealed.

 

Like a grass,

Ignored,

Wounded,

Taken for granted.

 

I lie with anguish,

Besieged by suffering,

 

Until what defines me, fades away.

 

 

Salamat ulet vradah!!! 

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